The
lost and found self-respect,
a story by Aditi Sahu is about a mother who has been a victim of
child abuse. As a result of her abuse, she is overprotective about
her daughter. The lines like “And that is why you should be
not be
kept away from even the worst aspects of my
life” are grammatically incorrect. Also the use of & is a
grammatical mistake.
The
White Lilly
is a nicely articulated story by Supriya Parulekar. It is about an orphan
girl - Melody, who is brought up by her aunt. The way she
incorporates another victim Kali in her story is absolutely
brilliant. At
one place the writer says that James had a gap in his teeth. Which
means he had teeth. At another place she says he sported a toothless
grin. Where did his teeth disappear Supriya?
I
doubt if A
Cry – Help Me
by Sunanda Bhadra can be called a story at all. Lines like “The
main occupation of the people in our village is agriculture as two
groups of people live there – the land owners who are the farmers,
and the land labourers.” make the so called cryptic story
unreadable.
The
Lost Dreams
by Swathi Shenoy depicts the plight of girls from rural, orthodox
families who want to pursue sports. Live
like a fairy
by Nikita Nepali is a piece which depicts the writer’s poor
knowledge of English language. Here are few of the lines from her
story. “She must have told you about what happened. She was not the
one who would cry after someone who actually did wrong with her. It
is better all this happened now. How will I face myself if something
wrong will be done by him? She was brave and honest and may be that
was the reason why she couldn’t handle dishonesty in Rihaan and
the relationship. He talked with Radhika in personal. She was mature
but her age was not.”
The
shadow by Dr. Sunil Kaushal is a predictable story where a woman
who was abused as a child takes her revenge when the culprit tries to
repeat the act with her daughter. The story the Guinea Pig by
Piyush Kaviraj is about experiments carried out on children.
The
Unheard Cry
by Brinda Tailor is about parents forcing their children to take up
engineering. Again
errors like “I brought thee
blade closer to my hips,” mar the narrative. The
Loud Silence
by Shreya Ganguly is about a girl who climbs up the prostitution
ladder to become an escort.
The story is about her plight after she turns 19. So that doesn’t
qualify for the theme of child abuse.
Tales
from a pit deep down by
Vaisakh E Hari is incomprehensible
in
most of its parts. A
Tryst with Naaz
is a story written by Leena Ratti who is described as “She also
like
to
listen to songs of Kishor Da and Lata ji.’
I
felt lucky while reading Just
a lucky day ..or not?
by
Shikha Kaul for it is a nice story with a good twist in this
otherwise banal compilation. Lesson
learned
by Dr. Lopamudra Maitra is about a girl who is eighteen, so not about
child abuse.
Left
to be Enstranged
by Ummul Fazal Fatima Khan has its share of errors too. Phrases like
“little kids” lines like “What did you heard?”, “Children
exceeds the limits where they couldn’t cope with it.” and “She
is a human child.” make reading the story a punishment.
That
shade of vermillion...
by Tanya Shrivastava has complex lines with mistakes like “No, we
were no kings but the ancestors of the biggest “zamindars”(landlords)
in the entire town. What I inherited from my forefathers were
– the
right
to consider ourselves as the sarkaar (government) of the town – we
used to make and break the laws; right to possess whatever you want
to – living or dead, both; the right to possess whatever you want
to – living or dead, both; the right to possess the poor and the
needy so that they could never raise their head against you; the
right to extreme patriarchy where women were considered not more than
means to an end and the right to practice all the social evils.”
To
conclude, Crumpled Voices 2 stands true to its name. It has stories
which are crumpled with errors of grammar, punctuation and spelling.
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